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The woman smiled, faint lines around her eyes crinkling as
she shook her head. “God, was I ever that young?”
The girl stepped back into the shadows, unsure and
uncertain. “Who are you?”
The woman extended her hand. “Come with me,” she said.
“There’s not much time.”
“For what?” The girl moved into the sun again, drawn towards
this woman whose hair sparkled with the same golden sheen as hers.
“To make things different,” she said. “To make things
right.”
“How do you know which is which?” the girl asked.
“You don’t,” the woman said. “That’s why I’m here”.
“You don’t,” the woman said. “That’s why I’m here”.
The classic entry of the "mentor" yet hints lead me to think she is other-worldly. No unicorns necessary to make an enchanted moment reality.
ReplyDeleteThanks Charli! This was a great prompt to get me back to the flash fiction challenges.
DeleteAwesome. Love this one. Sometimes I wish I could do this, to make things "right" or better but I know I never would because who knows what the hell you'd really do. Would things turn out worse?
ReplyDeleteI think about this a lot. What we might change if we could, how it might makes things better or worse. It's been kicking around in my head for a long time. Have you ever seen Peggy Sue Got Married?
DeleteI've heard of it, of course, but have never seen it. Should I?
DeleteThe way you wrote this one... Is this part of a book or a short story? It reads that way.
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ReplyDeleteI’ve nominated your blog for the Versatile Blogger Award because I think you’re awesome. (Acceptance optional and I apologize if you’ve been nominated recently—I tried to find fab bloggers who hadn’t been. Either way, pop over to my post nominating you: http://rantsaboutparenting.blogspot.com/2014/06/irony-and-versatility.html) Cheers!
No pressure. Optional acceptance. But, I do like seeing you around the blogosphere again and reading your flash.
Thank you! There is some irony here as I was nominated last month and have been slowly working on my own post and nominations (slow being the operative word) and of COURSE, I've nominated you too. Really appreciate the kind words.
DeleteOH, geez! I did the same thing. Procrastinated big time. It's not as easy as it sounds. Finish the one you're working on and just mention this one in the post or something (2 for 1) and think of it as a shout-out. :-)
DeleteThought-provoking: what will make things right/how will things be when they are right?
ReplyDeleteThanks Nora. I think about this a lot. How we know whether what we do is right and how much it would change if we knew what was to come.
DeleteThis was good. Really good. The two have to be the same person, just of different times. I am intrigued in finding out what they had to make right!
ReplyDeleteThanks! And although it's just an idea, you have the right idea about these characters.
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